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when-i-die.md

@@ -43,12 +43,12 @@ when i die
 
 ### Commentary
 
-I wrote this at about 4:00 this morning (2025-10-21)
+I wrote this at about 2025-10-21 04:00
 when I couldn't sleep.
 
 #### Theme
 
-At the time I thought the poem was very funny,
+At the time I thought the poem was very funny:
 it starts out morbid and death-negative,
 then becomes touching,
 then a sharp pivot to grotesque and absurd.
@@ -74,7 +74,8 @@ they're letting the reader off easy:
 "don't bother with burial or cremation,
 just toss me in the woods",
 but the convenience is negated by their second request,
-a task that would be so ethically and technically difficult
+a task that would be so ethically difficult
+(not to mention technically difficult)
 as to be impossible for almost all people.
 
 To make the speaker's request